over a year ago I started writing this fic and since I thought about the argument I told myself it was a really good idea to exercise the drama without the need (I thought then) to kill anyone. I love the scent, but every time I reread it I realize the serious mistakes I make when writing and update directly, instead of full write, revise, accommodate, and then upload to the web.
First of all, the plot itself is a mess. All are a string of bums who do not work or seek a livelihood (except Brendon who makes his life a smooth time servingies) and to vary Ryan comes up pregnant. Nobody gives a clear reason why not continued to study or what they do for a living ... only isolated from the other four guys that get together and play music, when they are doing So it is all a monotoníay never tire of it. There are almost no people outside their small circle, are only those four, occasionally Jac, George Ross, Matt July, but now.
On the other hand, there is an inconsistency between scenes, I'm very much on the thread. I leave an unfinished one hand and never put back on (& iqu
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